Where is my Son?

Okay, if you read my early posts about my frustrations with Jordan and his writing skills...you will be as confused as Jeff and I are. This year has been a total turn-around in regards to Jordan and his writing....instead of dreading it, I am hearing that he is disappointed when not given time in class to work on his writing...????....not Jordan, maybe Neil....but, not Jordan....

So, you be the judge, here is his latest writing assignment from Social Studies...okay, I just finished typing it up....um, yeah, Jordan wrote it....the last paragraph gives him away....
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Golden Sands, Fertile Soil

The immense desert prevents you from advancing any further in your journey. It's golden sand is beautiful and tempts you to cross. But if you do, you know you might not make it out. Before anything starts making any sense, you're crossing the gargantuan desert. By some miracle, you make it across, you see somethint amazing, you see Egypt. A week later, you are wandering along the waterfront of a titanic river. When hunger is about to make you fall, you see a couple men walking in front of you. You follow them and find yourself in a utopian city called Mesopotamia. Can it be the exact same thing as the civilization you found just a week before?

These two civilizations are alike in many ways. Both are polytheistic, meaning they worship many gods. Their writing evolved over years as well. They were treated unfairly based on their social class also. Other common similiarities included mining for turquoise and having irrigation systems. So, both civilizations have a lot in common.

Although Egypt and Mesopotamia have a lot in common, there are also a lot of differences. The mesopotamians created the first form of writing cuneiform. Egypt wasn't invaded as much though because Egypt is defended by deserts unlike Meopotamia. So, Mesopotamian history is more erratic. Egyptians mummified their dead and Mesopotamians creamated their dead. They both have a lot of differences.

"Which one's better?" You think to yourself. Egypt and mesopotamia are both really exciting places. Even though both have their ups and downs, it's just plain hard to pick one. So in conclusion, they both rule.